Talk:Renais

Review

Approved. Approval notes and changes below!

• Cream is a 6 year old girl standing at 70 cm, weighing 12 kg. Renais is 128 cm, 16 kg. This is very, very, very thin. You can stick by it if you want to, but even for an anorexically-thin character, I'd suggest something a little over 20, at least. Numbers be numbers, though, so it isn't a big deal.
• Removing the bit about reinforcing melee attacks with chaos energy in her special abilities section as this is something considered kind of standard capability for any character with sufficient energy. (Just trying to trim down this very huge quickbio box.)
• Shuffling some of the "unique ability" text off to her Ability Info section, where it is briefly touched upon.
• Shortening entry about baseball bat. Not trying to be difficult, here, but the sidebar is supposed to be very scarce on description, and serve merely as the briefest, most accessible overview. Details about weapons, if notable, can be included in trivia.
• Agility stars add up to: +3 for 110MPH top speed, +1 for "good" acceleration, +1 for basic acrobatics, +0.5 for high jumping. That makes for 4.5, which is what you have listed. However, it sounds like you intended for her to have a -1 star for not being able to swim, judging by the description. Did you forget it, or is there something we're overlooking?
• The rest of your stars seem to add up perfectly, so well done.
• It seems "General Info" vanished or was renamed, and there's a section on history before personality... Going to rearrange this to fit the standard structure.

In summary: If you want to address her weight, that is up to you. It would be nice to get clarity on her agility star thing, but it's not the end of the world, so, at your leisure. In short, it's approved, you're good, all is well, etc., feel free to get involved at the soonest opportunity.

Regarding opportunities themselves, right now we are in a bit of a slow drag because we're waiting for a side-thread to finish and free up some characters, but as soon as that's done, we'll be opening our next thread. I suggest you just get acquainted with the folks in the chat and, if you have questions, ask'em. It's always best to come into the story prepared and with some sense of what's going on. (Granted, you probably already know quite a bit of some of the history after all that stuff about Seven!)

Laaater.

-Psikeout 15:21, 20 July 2012 (EDT)