Talk:Carmen

Review and corrections

Not bad or anything, but... you only undershot the star ratings limit because you just forgot to count some that you implied were there. She's actually over the limit, but that's okay. Anyway, moving on...

Quickbio

Your sidebar isn't done much like we normally do it. Did you actually look at any other character profiles as you were advised to by the instructions? It'd just look a lot nicer to say something like...

• Skilled surfer

rather than

• surfing

Still, we'll go ahead and approve it. Oh, but also, trivial abilities like "cooking" don't belong here, nor do things that are already thoroughly covered under her star ratings (like swimming), so, just in case you wonder why they're gone now, that's why. Feel free to add them back into your trivia section if you like. Also gonna add some capital letters up in here...

Star rating stuff

It's a rocky trail going over these star ratings. I'm just going to correct them myself based on what I can glean from your information.

• For agility, you listed 4.5 stars. Your description indicates the following:
  • 100MPH top speed (+3 stars according to the chart)
  • Extremely fast swimmer (+2 stars)
  • No mention of quickness (thus we assume the default, that she is "averagely" quick, +0.5 stars)
  • Total: 5.5 stars. Correcting accordingly.

• For strength, you listed 2.5 stars. Your description indicates the following:
  • Slightly above average strength (+2.5 stars)
  • No mention of her build, even though it is mandatory to select one. I doubt you intended to imply she had a 0 star build (frail, weak), so, judging by her description and ability info, I presume she has an athletic build (+2 stars).
  • Total: 4.5 stars. Correcting accordingly.

• For toughness, you listed 3.5 stars. Your description indicates the following:
  • I'm guessing you went for the "trained fighter" rating (+1.5 stars)?
  • Guessing the "average build" thing applies here, also (so +2 stars)
  • Total: 3.5 stars. This one adds up correctly.

• For energy, you listed 4.5 stars. Your description indicates the following:
  • Hyper-energetic (+4 stars)
  • "Gets up quickly" probably means quick recovery? (+0.5 stars)
  • No mention of her chaos energy potential thing. I'm guessing she's not a corpse, though, so she gets the "average" level (+1 star)
  • Total: 5.5 stars. Correcting accordingly.

• New final total for your stars: 19. This is one star over the new member limit, but who's gonna split hairs over one star? Not me. Keep it.

Now stamped and approved. Feel free to continue to make tweaks to improve things for as long as you like. Just don't add any more abilities/powers/stars/etc. Thanks.

-Admin 16:46, 7 September 2012 (EDT)