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It's a classic remodel. I kind of skipped out on the general info because I don't know whether to ship it to G.U.N., Eggman, or Nocturnes.

::Give us a few paragraphs of general info about your character.
> Dr. Eggman designed this e-100 series to use ring energy as a power source. It was modeled after Gamma along with several other version by Eggman. The weapon system was less optimal in serving Eggman's schemes. It was left dismantled in its packaging amongst other robots in a storage facility.

::Does your character have any skills or special abilities, a gimmick, or anything that makes it stand out as an athlete or fighter?
>It's true potential is it's stealth capability. It's artificial intelligence, targeting, and light weight makes it the perfect candidate for stealth. It is equipped with a missile launcher, and a laser gun. It can serve for reconnaissance. It is a robot of good intellect.

::Does your character have any purpose?
> It will resume it's previous command until overridden.

::Do you live in or near the Americas, or elsewhere?
> Yes

While it was intercepting signals, it processed a casualty report from one of its attacks. Left to its thoughts, it developed remorse for the unintended casualties.

The titanium alloy armor assets it in almost all high pressure ground navigation.

propellers that hover from a gravitational field (that's my theory on it anyway)

hologram-transmitter

Its Laser Gun can fire pulses that can pierce through metal from long range inflicting critical damage at close range.

The Missile Launcher attachment located at the base of the Laser Gun launches up to four seeker torpedo missiles, but is short on ammunition.

The Gravitational Hover Propeller is a green white striped round sphere cut through the middle with a propeller.

Author:	Nightmare [ Thu Sep 06, 2012 10:06 am ]
Post subject:	E-108 Iota
It's a classic remodel. I kind of skipped out on the general info because I don't know whether to ship it to G.U.N., Eggman, or Nocturnes. ::What is your character's name? > E-108 Iota ::Species? > Robot ::Age? > 2-3 years ::Give us a few paragraphs of general info about your character. > Dr. Eggman designed this e-100 series to use ring energy as a power source. It was modeled after Gamma along with several other version by Eggman. The weapon system was less optimal in serving Eggman's schemes. It was left dismantled in its packaging amongst other robots in a storage facility. ::Does your character have any skills or special abilities, a gimmick, or anything that makes it stand out as an athlete or fighter? >It's true potential is it's stealth capability. It's artificial intelligence, targeting, and light weight makes it the perfect candidate for stealth. It is equipped with a missile launcher, and a laser gun. It can serve for reconnaissance. It is a robot of good intellect. ::Does your character have any purpose? > It will resume it's previous command until overridden. ::Does your character have an image? You can post it here, if so (as long as you follow the rules mentioned in the character guidelines). If not, please write a description of your character's appearance. >It bears the typical resemblance of Gamma, with the chicken leg concept. The only difference is that the chest piece is a lot thinner, since it does not use an animal for a power source. The rest is the same as e-102. It's head is fixed into place with a yellow "hood" over its black round head. The body is green striped with two vents to prevent the core from overheating. The thin exterior armor can be disassembled revealing its core, metallic joints and processor. The right wrist has been replaced with a laser gun attachment. There is a panel on the aft side, to insert a new ring. It's simple design can function in hot or cold weather, but it is prone to wear down if not treated. ::Will you be around to play your character regularly? > Yes ::Do you live in or near the Americas, or elsewhere? > Yes ::Are you okay with having your character information and image on this website (such as on the wiki)?[/color] > Yes and Yes, provided I can make said image or convince someone to make it ::What is your name? > Chris

Author:	Admin [ Thu Sep 06, 2012 10:11 am ]
Post subject:	Re: E-108 Iota
Please remove your italics first. Bodies of unnecessarily-emphasized text are a pain to read.

Author:	Nightmare [ Thu Sep 06, 2012 10:13 am ]
Post subject:	Re: E-108 Iota
done

Author:	Admin [ Thu Sep 06, 2012 10:25 am ]
Post subject:	Re: E-108 Iota
Quote: It's a classic remodel. I kind of skipped out on the general info because I don't know whether to ship it to G.U.N., Eggman, or Nocturnes. Just FYI, around here, the Nocturnus clan is not active in our story. Some members did want to include Sonic Chronicles in our story, so they exist, but the events are well in the past now, so the Nocturnus are long gone. Quote: ::Give us a few paragraphs of general info about your character. > Dr. Eggman designed this e-100 series to use ring energy as a power source. It was modeled after Gamma along with several other version by Eggman. The weapon system was less optimal in serving Eggman's schemes. It was left dismantled in its packaging amongst other robots in a storage facility. It's not that we demand fluff or filler, but note that it says "a few paragraphs of general info about your character," and you literally gave one very short paragraph. Is there nothing else you can think of about this character that would make it interesting to have around? Quote: ::Does your character have any skills or special abilities, a gimmick, or anything that makes it stand out as an athlete or fighter? >It's true potential is it's stealth capability. It's artificial intelligence, targeting, and light weight makes it the perfect candidate for stealth. It is equipped with a missile launcher, and a laser gun. It can serve for reconnaissance. It is a robot of good intellect. No offense, but this writing is very rough. Every sentence starts with "it," it has absolutely no flow, and you don't seem to know the difference between "its" and "it's." Quote: ::Does your character have any purpose? > It will resume it's previous command until overridden. What does its "previous command" entail? C'mon, give us something here. Quote: ::Do you live in or near the Americas, or elsewhere? > Yes This isn't a yes-or-no question... I know you said you skimped on a lot because you lack some information on our story (what information it is you need, I'm not sure), but maybe you should ask and find the answers you need, then submit a more complete profile. As it stands, I could only accept this as a Beginner Member character. It just doesn't show the level of polish and completion we'd expect from a full member character. If you're okay with that and don't want to flesh it out more, I can mark you as a beginner member, but otherwise, you may want to reply to this topic with another attempt if you still want to join.

Author:	Nightmare [ Thu Sep 06, 2012 11:43 pm ]
Post subject:	Re: E-108 Iota
Resubmitting ::What is your character's name? > E-108 Iota ::Species? > Robot ::Age? > 2-3 years ::Give us a few paragraphs of general info about your character. > Iota was battle-born for undersea combat, contesting submarines with it's titanium alloy. This titanium stealth prototype prolonged its destruction by ambushing its enemy from the sea ground. It was originally tested with a ring power drive and a transmitter capable of intercepting radio and satellite signals. While it was intercepting signals, it processed a casualty report from one of its attacks. Left to its thoughts, it developed remorse for the unintended casualties. Despite this it was unable to break from its usual command program and sought failure as a means to have itself decommissioned. After failing to breach an enemy cruiser for fear of harming residents it was reassigned to a small important facility. Its final mission was to remain defender of the important facility in an undisclosed location until said sensor were tripped. It remains stationary, inactive, except for its sensor apparatus located on its 'hood'. ::Does your character have any skills or special abilities, a gimmick, or anything that makes it stand out as an athlete or fighter? >E-108 Iota features a light-weight submersible model with an enhanced artificial intelligence. The titanium alloy armor assets it in almost all high pressure ground navigation. Some of the gadgets include: A sensor that will target and identify objects from heat signature, lighting or motion, a Ring Power Drive, a Satellite Transmitter able to utilize satellites for mapping and communication, encryption software, an optical device able to enhance night time vision (Useful for scoping out targets), a database used for exploiting weaknesses and advantages, propellers that hover from a gravitational field (that's my theory on it anyway), Spring loaded legs for a evasive maneuver and a hologram-transmitter. Its Laser Gun can fire pulses that can pierce through metal from long range inflicting critical damage at close range. The Missile Launcher attachment located at the base of the Laser Gun launches up to four seeker torpedo missiles, but is short on ammunition. On the rare occasion of close quarters, a simple short titanium blade is fitted in a left compartment. ::Does your character have any purpose? > It will resume it's previous command until overridden. (The command was stated in the General Info) ::Does your character have an image? You can post it here, if so (as long as you follow the rules mentioned in the character guidelines). If not, please write a description of your character's appearance. >Iota bears the typical resemblance of the e-100 series with several modifications for sea combat. Without modifications it has: a black rotatable head with a yellow 'hood', a semi square green chest with one white stripe, its thin cylindrical right arm is replaced at the wrist with a laser gun attachment, and a jointed chicken walker design for its legs with V-shaped feet. Some modifications include: The chest is more slender favoring a ring powered drive as opposed to an Flicky container, both legs have springs located in the armor interior, and a aft panel built to open at Iota's request and load a new ring into the drive. The Gravitational Hover Propeller is a green white striped round sphere cut through the middle with a propeller. ::Will you be around to play your character regularly? > Yes ::Do you live in or near the Americas, or elsewhere? > in America ::Are you okay with having your character information and image on this website (such as on the wiki)?[/color] > Yes ::What is your name? > Chris

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Author:	Admin [ Fri Sep 07, 2012 12:55 pm ]
Post subject:	Re: E-108 Iota
Quote: While it was intercepting signals, it processed a casualty report from one of its attacks. Left to its thoughts, it developed remorse for the unintended casualties. If by casualties you mean deaths, and this robot is supposed to be Eggman-built and aligned, we can't really go with that. We take the approach that states Eggman is crazy and dangerous, but takes care to avoid killing anyone, and may only risk doing so in his most desperate moments. If you just meant it in the sense of incapacitations and injuries, though, that'd be okay. Quote: The titanium alloy armor assets it in almost all high pressure ground navigation. What is this supposed to mean? "Asset" isn't a verb, and what on earth is "high pressure ground navigation"? Quote: propellers that hover from a gravitational field (that's my theory on it anyway) ... Do you really think propellers are anti-gravity devices? (Believe it or not, this is not an early example of antigrav tech.) Quote: hologram-transmitter Something that transmits holograms? Are you sure you know what a hologram is? Quote: Its Laser Gun can fire pulses that can pierce through metal from long range inflicting critical damage at close range. Though we still don't have much in the way of examples for real-life laser weaponry, a basic understanding of what lasers are reveals that they're not going to be blasting through armor at long range. They bloom and become ineffective due to the Earth's atmosphere. I bet you were just using the word "laser" as a generic term for "energy weapon," though... Quote: The Missile Launcher attachment located at the base of the Laser Gun launches up to four seeker torpedo missiles, but is short on ammunition. Torpedoes and missiles are two different things, unless you're referring to missiles that carry torpedoes to water (?)... Quote: The Gravitational Hover Propeller is a green white striped round sphere cut through the middle with a propeller. lolwat? This can't go on, sir. I'm just gonna tell you straight and not candy-coat it: You aren't good enough at science fiction to be able to write for a robot, even for a Sonic RP, and I don't wanna see this kind of stuff around here. You may want to check out that other site I mentioned before. No hard feelings intended. Take care, and best of luck.

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