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| Author: | avenger [ Sun Oct 30, 2011 12:25 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Avenger the Hedgehog |
What is your character's name? > Avenger Species? > Hedgehog Age? > 19 Give us a couple paragraphs of general info about your character. For example, what's the character's personality like? What kind of things does he or she do? Why does he or she do it? > Avenger had a troubled upbringing, due to the fact that he is part of a very scientific family he never saw much of his parents as they were biologists who were always off exploring exotic places making him feel like he was second to their work, the only person he ever felt close to was his older older sister who died when Avenger was just 8 in a rock-climbing accident,After this he felt isolated from the world finding it hard to make friends as he tried to show no emotion to anyone. A few years later his parents decided they wanted to find out more about chaos energy experimenting on different species to see if there was any difference in how they controlled their powers, Avenger was present during one of these experiments where his parents had a fox connected to a anto see if it was possible to transfer chaos energy to inanimate objects, however something went wrong causing the machine to overload and in the ensuing explosion Avenger was imbued with some of the chaos energy. After spending some time in hospital the doctors revealed this to him saying that he may have also gained some powers along with this but that it was his job to work out what they were. At the age of 15 he learned what these powers were, he learned them during eggman's invasion of his town, he was running from some of eggman's robots but got cornered so with nowhere left to turn he decided to run straight into them, he suddenly felt a great surge of energy from within himself and found that he was holding a spear made of pure ice which was strengthened by the chaos energy, with this he destroyed the robots and managed to escape the town along with some other survivors. Learning that he had the power to summon and manipulate ice was a great turning point in Avenger's life, with it he went his own way contributing to the fight against eggman wherever he could accepting all the help he could get and trying to maintain a positive outlook on life. Does your character have any skills or special abilities, a gimmick, or anything that makes it stand out as an athlete or fighter? If so, talk a little about it here. > Thanks to a little motivation from eggman Avenger learned he had the ability to create and manipulate and control ice > Due to his ice powers Avenger also has a weakness of fire and heat which means he struggles to cope with hotter conditions > Having been brought up by a scientific family he is also quite intelligent meaning he can think fast and help others work out problems Does your character have any purpose? (It's okay if you don't have this fully figured out yet, but all the better if your character does have an agenda or some sort of driving force to it to make it interact with other characters.) > Helping others fight against eggman and generally trying to stop anything bad happen to anyone especially his friends Does your character have an image? You can post it here, if so (as long as you follow the rules mentioned in the character guidelines). If not, please write a description of your character's appearance. > Avenger is a hedgehog, around 4'5 weighing around 40kg, has read fur though the tips of his quills are black, wears black sneakers with purple laces, navy baggy jeans and no top Will you be around to play your character regularly? (i.e. Keeping daily tabs on any threads you involve yourself in, and posting whenever it's your turn?) > Generally quite active around normal hours, always active at weekends Do you live in or near the Americas, or elsewhere? (It may be difficult for you to participate in any of the fast-moving sessions if you're only online when the rest of the group is asleep. So, we ask this just to be aware of any potential problems.) > In the UK but it hopefully won't be a problem Are you okay with having your character information and image on this website (such as on the wiki) for as long as you're an active member? > I'm up for that What is your name? (Don't post your last name! This forum isn't private!) > Cameron |
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| Author: | Admin [ Mon Oct 31, 2011 12:36 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Avenger the Hedgehog |
You have some things working against you here. 1. It's a hedgehog. Furthermore, it's a hugely tall and skinny hedgehog with baggy pants, elemental powers, an extravagantly theatrical name, and a slightly sobby backstory (childhood neglect, loss of only loved one, accident in scientific experiment). Hedgehogs already come under a lot of extra scrutiny here because of their wildly unoriginal overuse in Sonic fandom. 2. There are tons of run-on sentences. It's to such a degree that this is difficult to read comfortably. It's okay to use periods. Also, I'm not sure what you were trying to say in at least one place. ("his parents had a fox connected to a anto see if it was possible to transfer chaos energy") 3. The one hedgehog fancharacter we do have already has powers that involve crystal. It's a little too similar, right down to the example of creating a spear. If you still want to apply to join with this character, you'll need to try to use periods, make your character less likely to infringe on the only hedgehog we already have, and maybe spend a little more time making it seem more... maturely designed. I'm sorry, but we all very accurately knew just what to expect the instant the title "Avenger the Hedgehog" was spotted. |
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